Re: the city is stuck in the past

Originally Posted by
alpacinoutd
Is this good?
The world was now almost two decades into the twenty-first century, the age of driverless electric cars, but this city was stuck in the 1990s. The tired diesel cars in the city belched a thick black smoke that blackened the lungs of their drivers.
I like it.
One note: Diesel exhaust usually blackens the lungs of the drivers behind the belching cars and trucks, not their own drivers. So I got rid of their.
I'm not a teacher. I speak American English. I've tutored writing at the University of Southern Maine and have done a good deal of copy editing and writing, occasionally for publication.