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    he became an addict

    Are these good?

    1. He became a heroin addict. He came from work to get high, injecting the nights away.

    2. He became a cocaine addict. He came from work to get high, sniffing the afternoons away.

    3. He became a pot addict. He came from work to get high, smoking the afternoons away.

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    Re: he became an addict

    Quote Originally Posted by alpacinoutd View Post
    Are these good?

    1. He became a heroin addict. He came home from work to get high, injecting [or shooting] the nights away.

    2. He became a cocaine addict. He came home from work to get high, snorting the afternoons away. [Sniffing sounds old-fashioned.]

    3. He became a pothead. He came home from work to get high, smoking the afternoons away.
    Yes, they are.

    The changes I made make them much more natural.
    Last edited by emsr2d2; 23-Jan-2021 at 20:54. Reason: Fixed typo
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    Re: he became an addict

    What about this?

    He became a heroin addict. He came home from work to get high, injecting the nights away until sleep took him.

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    Re: he became an addict

    Those last four words don't seem necessary. They're already implied.
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    Re: he became an addict

    For me, "injecting the nights away" suggests that he did it all night and, therefore, didn't get any sleep!
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: he became an addict

    Quote Originally Posted by alpacinoutd View Post
    sniffing the afternoons away.
    We use snort for powders like powdered drugs, and sniff for liquid ones like glue or poppers where people inhale the vapours.

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    Re: he became an addict

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    For me, "injecting the nights away" suggests that he did it all night and, therefore, didn't get any sleep!
    Good point.
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    Re: he became an addict

    Doesn't heroin make you sleep? Morphine is named after the Greek god of sleep.

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    Re: he became an addict

    Unlike 2 and 3, I don't think 1 works at all. You can't 'inject the night away' if what you're injecting is heroin. For a start, you'll only be injecting every four or five hours or so, in between long stretches of very sleep-like inactivity.

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    Re: he became an addict

    Luckily, I can do long stretches of very sleep-like activity without help.

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