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    the cries of the wolf cut through the night

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    John could hear an animal deep in the forest. The anguished cries of a wolf cut through the cold night over the faint murmur of wind. He assumed the wolf must be wounded or lamenting her slain cub.
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    Re: the cries of the wolf cut through the night

    Quote Originally Posted by alpacinoutd View Post
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    John could hear the howls of a wounded animal from deep in the forest. The anguished cries of a wolf cut pierced through the cold night over amidst the faint murmur of wind. He assumed the wolf must be have been wounded or lamenting her slain cub.
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    Re: the cries of the wolf cut through the night

    I'd remove "through" after "pierced" in tedmc's suggestion. It's redundant.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: the cries of the wolf cut through the night

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    I'd remove "through" after "pierced" in tedmc's suggestion. It's redundant.

    What about my version?

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    Re: the cries of the wolf cut through the night

    Must have been wounded or was lamenting.

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    Re: the cries of the wolf cut through the night

    Quote Originally Posted by Tdol View Post
    Must have been wounded or was lamenting.
    So is this okay?

    John could hear an animal deep in the forest. The anguished cries of a wolf cut through the cold night over the faint murmur of wind. He assumed the wolf must have been wounded or lamenting her slain cub.

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    Re: the cries of the wolf cut through the night

    I prefer was lamenting, or some other form, because must have + past participle then a present participle is a bit of a jump, and it is making two assumptions for the price of one. The rest is fine.

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    Re: the cries of the wolf cut through the night

    I don't hear wolves often enough to know if the sound its making indicates it's been wounded. Apparently, John can tell that. He must be very familiar with the sounds wolves make. Otherwise, how can he possibly guess what condition the animal is in?
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