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    Re: she was swept with airsickness

    Well, it's not pleasant, but I wouldn't say it's a burning sensation that you feel. It's the stomach's contents that are expelled from the body when a person vomits. So the vomitus is the same temperature as the stomach. (I have myself vomited, though not recently.) It's not a burning sensation that you feel. It just feels like the stuff coming back up. (Which is what it is.)
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    Re: she was swept with airsickness

    I think the OP is using a different meaning of "burning". When you vomit, there is a definite taste of acid in your throat. It's that sort of burning, not the heat kind.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: she was swept with airsickness

    People with eating disorders who make themselves vomit frequently can corrode the enamel of their teeth because of the acid.

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    Re: she was swept with airsickness

    I think the OP should make it clear which type of "burning" he means.

    It's been a while, but I don't remember an acidy taste in my mouth. (It was bad enough having to throw up in the first place.)
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    Re: she was swept with airsickness

    Is this okay?

    As the plane took off, a strange mix of airsickness and homesickness swept over her. Her stomach heaved and rebelled, and nausea overcame her as the coffee she had drunk before the flight burned her throat and poured out of her mouth over the back of the man sitting in the front row. Overwhelmed with burning shame, she would have liked to be swallowed up by a black hole right there and then.

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    Re: she was swept with airsickness

    Quote Originally Posted by alpacinoutd View Post
    Is this okay?

    As the plane took off, a strange mix of airsickness and homesickness swept over her. Her stomach heaved and rebelled, and nausea overcame her as the coffee she had drunk before the flight burned her throat and poured out of her mouth over the back of the man sitting in the front row. Overwhelmed with burning shame, she would have liked to to have been swallowed up by a black hole right there and then.
    Well, it's hard to see how she could have been feeling homesick as she had just left. Also, the airsickness part is described quite well, so you don't really need the word. Perhaps:

    She suddenly felt a queasy feeling, and then it happened. She threw up all over the seat in front of her. She felt so embarrassed she wished she could crawl into a hole.

    (Yours is not terrible. I just decided to write my own version instead of copying everything.)
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    Re: she was swept with airsickness

    Just so I'm clear, is this okay?

    As the plane took off, a strange mix of airsickness and homesickness swept over her. Her stomach heaved and rebelled, and nausea overcame her as the coffee she had drunk before the flight burned her throat and poured out of her mouth over the back of the man sitting in the front row. Overwhelmed with burning shame, she would have liked to be swallowed up by a black hole right there and then.

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    Re: she was swept with airsickness

    It's OK.
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    Re: she was swept with airsickness

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    As I have just posted in another of your threads, asking if something is "good" is fairly pointless. It asks for a subjective opinion. Ask us if your pieces are grammatically correct.
    I just want to pick up on this point because I've been gagging to say something similar for a while. I don't know why I haven't.

    alpacinoutd, when you ask us whether your writing is good, it's almost meaningless. We could equally say yes or no, depending on how high our expectations of your writing are. Now, you obviously have a good command of English, but as an English teacher, I feel we have a duty to be picky with you where we might not be with a non-teacher. I hope you understand that.

    As emsr2d2 suggests, asking us whether your writing is grammatically correct is a much clearer and simpler question, but I have a feeling that what you often really want to know is how you can improve your texts more generally. And since, I think we'll agree, you're not going to win the Nobel Prize for Literature for at least another few years, there's almost always a way to do that.

    In my professional opinion, the main weakness of your writing is your vocabulary accuracy. If I sometimes seem very picky (or pickier than other members) about the way you use words, it is because I'm trying to help you specifically to tighten up this area.

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    Re: she was swept with airsickness

    Well, I frequently suggest different words. And I'm sure he thinks I'm picky. However. I also think that's exactly what he wants.
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