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    Re: Would you be so kind and help with my Msc application?

    Quote Originally Posted by carl_gauss View Post
    This is the 100th hundredth time I write have written it. I basically know it by memory, but what can I improve?
    Quote Originally Posted by carl_gauss View Post
    The prompt in on the university website says this:

    As for the deadline, it's February 15.
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    ok OK/Okay. I have edited the post.
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    Here is the prompt with the information:

    Also, I frankly honestly don't know the deadline. Looking through university websites gives me a pulsing headache, and I couldn't haven't been able to find the information, so I had to write send them an email.
    Quote Originally Posted by carl_gauss View Post
    Yes, I tried before, but as it is not very clear where I do, I used some better terminology. Here it is:

    did it Have I improved it? What can I do better?
    Carl_guass, please look carefully at my multiple corrections above. You will, no doubt, be disappointed that I have not even looked at your main text, but you will be unsurprised to learn that all errors jump off the page at us and we correct them. You must, at all times, take care with your capitalisation and punctuation, not just in essays.

    In the final quote box above, I have no idea what you mean by the underlined section.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Would you be so kind and help with my Msc application?

    Quote Originally Posted by carl_gauss View Post
    I was born in the industrial port town of ABCD, where the river meets the sea. When I was a young student, I went on a school trip to a fertilizer factory, which I found fascinating. That was a milestone for me, because previously I had wanted to become a mathematician, but after that school trip, I decided to become a chemical engineer. Thus, I chose automation and control engineering for my bachelor’s degree, because I am interested in research to help underdeveloped countries like my own improve production efficiency and people’s lives. I picked Politecnico di Milano for this because it is a top European university and has an excellent reputation for research.

    My ideals shaped my commitment, but I owe my motivation to some important figures. Firstly, my transport phenomena teacher, Professor *****, who only through his charisma, while teaching fluid mechanics, I began to learn modelling and how to understand reality. He really made me love engineering. Secondly, my process control teacher Dr. ****** was decisive for me, as he taught me that I did not have to renounce math, and that engineering could complement math in my life. Additionally, he helped me find the beautiful complexity in engineering, and this led me to choose him as my thesis advisor, where he taught me advanced linear algebra, bifurcation analysis, numerical methods, feedback linearization, and IMC tuning.

    As part of my thesis, I published a nonlinear control article in the Italian Journal “************”, with a presentation at the **** International Congress of Chemical and Process Engineering in Prague in 2018. Mainly, the article used system dynamics, and bifurcation theory to find stable areas of the IMC tuned PID parameter space, of a substrate inhibited bioreactor, comparing it to the same system but feedback linearized, finding heuristics for future control, and managing uncertainty of controller parameters. An insightful and complex method was used to find practical rules. For instance, an upper limit was found in the set point of about 90% of substrate inflow. Additionally, another heuristic was about uncertainty parameters. It was found that performance is less affected by overestimation of these rather than underestimation.

    Heuristics were also useful in my next work, where I helped in a pilot plant design with the Bioprocess research team, to turn waste hydrochloric acid and urine into fertilizer, sponsored by ******, a metal deck company, and *****, a portable bathroom company. I designed controller loops units, meeting operational targets. [ 1] the practical application of my knowledge was arduous, given that until that point my work was purely theoretical. Thus, I stabilized the principal units, around the operational equilibrium points, which signified the possibility of escalating the control of the plant to a higher scale. Additionally, the stabilization time was short enough, that it made it worthwhile to examine economically the process control of the future plant in more detail.

    Both those exciting projects have motivated me to continue my research into nonlinear control, which I would like to conduct at Politecnico di Milano. With my experience and dedication, I will need little support to start new research work, but can achieve much more with significant support. In brief, the reason I am looking to do a master’s in automation and control engineering is to establish my career in this industry. Additionally, I have useful research experience (see article published in the journal “************”, with speaker position in the **** CHISA conference, both of which required significant effort, given the level of difficulty of the subject matter). Furthermore, my professional experience will be incredibly important in helping me in my future formation, including in my master’s and PhD.

    Yours faithfully,
    [ 1]: I have no idea what that underlined part means. Leave it out if it is not necessary.

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    Re: Would you be so kind and help with my Msc application?

    Quote Originally Posted by carl_gauss View Post
    OK. I edited the post
    You need to capitalize the first word of every sentence and the letter i when it is used as a pronoun. Also, capitalize every proper noun.

    I was quite specific. I asked you to post one paragraph at a time after the post where I said that. I did not ask you to edit the OP.
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    Re: Would you be so kind and help with my Msc application?

    Your word choice leaves much to be desired. You can put a shortcut to www.dictionary.com on your phone. It's quite helpful. They always have several example sentences for each word.
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