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    Re: Inside his head is a big dark mess.

    Make it: His mind is a Goya painting.

    I think of Goya paintings as dark but not messy.
    Last edited by Charlie Bernstein; 30-Jan-2021 at 21:19.
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    Re: Inside his head is a big dark mess.

    Quote Originally Posted by Charlie Bernstein View Post
    Make it: His mind is a Goya painting.
    What would that mean exactly? That he is a bad person with evil thoughts?

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    Re: Inside his head is a big dark mess.

    Saturn devouring his son is both messy and indescribably dark to me. And it's not just the horror of the act- the eyes haunt me. If my head turned into that, I'd be worried.

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    Re: Inside his head is a big dark mess.

    Quote Originally Posted by Tdol View Post
    Saturn devouring his son is both messy and indescribably dark to me. And it's not just the horror of the act- the eyes haunt me. If my head turned into that, I'd be worried.
    So do you think this is okay?

    After she broke his heart, his mind has been a Goya paintings, a big dark mess.

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    Re: Inside his head is a big dark mess.

    Quote Originally Posted by Tdol View Post
    Saturn devouring his son is both messy and indescribably dark to me. . . .
    Sure is! Good point. I mostly think of him as stark. Thanks.
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    Re: Inside his head is a big dark mess.

    Quote Originally Posted by alpacinoutd View Post
    So do you think this is okay?

    After she broke his heart, his mind has been a Goya paintings, a big dark mess.
    Since she broke him, his mind has been a Goya paintings, a big dark mess.

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