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    alpacinoutd is offline Key Member
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    Sara's mother died of cancer

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    Sara's mother died of cancer. She would see her in her dreams, a big orange tumor creeping up and down her body as if it had tentacles. Sara would reach out to hold her hand, but her skeletal body would crumble and vanish. She would wake up in the darkness of her room, wondering when she can get a few hours of uninterrupted sleep.

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    Re: Sara's mother died of cancer

    Quote Originally Posted by alpacinoutd View Post
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    Sara's mother died of cancer. She would see her in her dreams, a big orange tumor creeping up and down her body as if it had tentacles. Sara would reach out to hold her hand, but her skeletal body would crumble and vanish. She would wake up in the darkness of her room, wondering when she could/might/would get a few hours of uninterrupted sleep.
    It's good.
    I'm not a teacher. I speak American English. I've tutored writing at the University of Southern Maine and have done a good deal of copy editing and writing, occasionally for publication.

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