Reply With QuoteHis dead mother was still alive? I'm not sure how you want me to imagine that.
(You haven't proofread either sentence very well. Have another look.)
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30-Jan-2021, 22:26 #1
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Her tears and her screams raced inside his head.
1. John fell into a deep sleep. His dead mother was still alive on the hospital bed. Her tears and her screams raced inside his head.
2. She lay on the bed, staring at the ceiling. Her sister's desperate screams raced in her head.Last edited by alpacinoutd; 31-Jan-2021 at 13:40.
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31-Jan-2021, 00:35 #2
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Re: Her tears and hear screams raced inside his head.
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31-Jan-2021, 13:41 #3
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Re: Her tears and hear screams raced inside his head.
I fixed them.
Originally Posted by jutfrank
Yes his mother had passed away but in his dream she was still alive.
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02-Feb-2021, 15:01 #4
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Re: Her tears and hear screams raced inside his head.
My focus is on the "race" part. If it doesn't work, what can I use?
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03-Feb-2021, 03:19 #5
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Re: Her tears and hear screams raced inside his head.
Raced is fine.
I'm not a teacher. I speak American English. I've tutored writing at the University of Southern Maine and have done a good deal of copy editing and writing, occasionally for publication.
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03-Feb-2021, 13:46 #6
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Re: Her tears and hear screams raced inside his head.
How about ran round?
