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    The lavenders were rippling in the soft wind.

    Is this correct? Can I stylistically improve it?

    The lavenders were rippling in the soft wind. Jane lay amid the field, the breeze caressing her face. The purple of the meadow merged with the purple of her blouse.

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    Re: The lavenders were rippling in the soft wind.

    Quote Originally Posted by alpacinoutd View Post
    Is this correct? Can I stylistically improve it?

    The lavender was rippling in the soft wind. Jane lay amid the field, the breeze caressing her face. The purple of the meadow merged with the purple of her blouse.
    It looks like it says just what you want.
    I'm not a teacher. I speak American English. I've tutored writing at the University of Southern Maine and have done a good deal of copy editing and writing, occasionally for publication.

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    Re: The lavenders were rippling in the soft wind.

    I don't like "amid the field". She was lying amid the flowers or stems of the lavender. If you want to use "the field", say "Jane lay in the middle of the field" or just "Jane lay in the field".
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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