alpacinou
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- Sep 30, 2019
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- Persian
- Home Country
- Iran
- Current Location
- Iran
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John's wife broke him by sleeping with his best friend. The nights became rough and endless. He would wake up wanting to tear the whole room apart. After a few weeks, he found himself on the verge of total derangement. On a rainy March morning, he went to a diner near the lake after yet another sleepless night. A lissome woman was sitting alone in a corner table, nursing a cup of coffee. For some reason, he approached her table. A puzzled look flickered her face.
"May I help you?", she asked after showing him a life-giving smile. She was 35-ish, her blonde hair neatly bobbed.
John shuffled reluctantly towards her. "Are you...are you Nicole? I think we went to the same high school," he said.
"Yes, I am," she said.
After two months of dating Nicole, John could sleep again. The volcano inside him ceased burbling. He had found peace in his heart, as if his wife never existed.
John's wife broke him by sleeping with his best friend. The nights became rough and endless. He would wake up wanting to tear the whole room apart. After a few weeks, he found himself on the verge of total derangement. On a rainy March morning, he went to a diner near the lake after yet another sleepless night. A lissome woman was sitting alone in a corner table, nursing a cup of coffee. For some reason, he approached her table. A puzzled look flickered her face.
"May I help you?", she asked after showing him a life-giving smile. She was 35-ish, her blonde hair neatly bobbed.
John shuffled reluctantly towards her. "Are you...are you Nicole? I think we went to the same high school," he said.
"Yes, I am," she said.
After two months of dating Nicole, John could sleep again. The volcano inside him ceased burbling. He had found peace in his heart, as if his wife never existed.