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    The stench of the factory blew in the house through the window.

    Is this correct and natural?

    The stench of the factory blew in the house through the window. A cacophony of coughs went off inside the house, growing louder by the second. He decided to go home. The party had finished about an hours ago anyway. He was walking home alone, feeling the crunch of snow beneath his feet. What was he doing in this cold town between Ohio River and nowhere? He could hear the distant woof of stray dogs in the distance. Suddenly his senses began to sharpen as he heard something moving in the snow-covered plain beside him. Adrenaline scorched through the whiskey in his blood as he turned around and saw a massive animal, its eyes glinting in the faint glow of the street lamp. Please tell me that is a nightmare. Please tell me my alcohol-fogged brain is making up this image. He stared at the animal for a few seconds before starting to run with all the strength he could summon.

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    Re: The stench of the factory blew in the house through the window.

    Quote Originally Posted by alpacinoutd View Post
    Is this correct and natural?

    The stench of the factory blew in the house through the window. A cacophony of coughs went off inside the house, growing louder by the second. He decided to go home. The party had finished about an hour ago anyway. He was walking home alone, feeling the crunch of snow beneath his feet and alone with his thoughts. What was he doing in this cold town between Ohio River and nowhere? He could hear the distant woof of stray dogs in the distance. Suddenly his senses began to sharpen as he heard something moving in the snow-covered plain beside him. Adrenaline scorched through the whiskey in his blood as he turned around and saw a massive animal, its eyes glinting in the faint glow of the street lamp. Please tell me that is a nightmare. Please tell me my alcohol-fogged brain is making up this image. He stared at the animal for a few seconds before starting to run with all the strength he could summon.
    He took off running and ran until he got home. It took him a while to realize that the animal was purely from his imagination.
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    Re: The stench of the factory blew in the house through the window.

    The stench of from the factory blew (was blown/wafted) in into the house through the window.

    A cacophony is a mixture of sounds, so I think it is not appropriate for just coughing sounds.
    Last edited by tedmc; 16-Feb-2021 at 04:42.
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    Re: The stench of the factory blew in the house through the window.

    Quote Originally Posted by tedmc View Post


    A cacophony is a mixture of sounds, so I think it is not appropriate for just coughing sounds.
    Do others agree? A bunch of people started coughing with various intensities.

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    Re: The stench of the factory blew in the house through the window.

    Perhaps:

    The room was filled with the sounds of people coughing.
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