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    My travel related work

    I want to improve my writing skills. To achieve this end, whatever I face in my everyday life, I try to express some of those situations in words. It is of great help to me, when someone edit my writings in this forum. In that serious, I am writing one more paragraph. I am looking forward to seeing it as edited.(I think that the underlined sentence is grammatically incorrect)

    I take care of my boss travel related work, not only for him but also for his family. His family includes his wife, two children and two nannies to children. Some times, I find this work very tiresome as he travels frequently internationally as well as domestically. When I tell this thing to someone that I handle this type of task, that person may take it lightly and may think that it is easy to handle such type of tasks. To handle this type of work, one must have in-depth knowledge of how to complete visa related formalities and other travel related matters. This job demands that person should have lot of patience and should have a habit of not losing his nerves when travel program is to be arranged at a short notice. That person should also be good in time management. Searching the flights options, in first class or business class, for his visit to multiple countries in line with his meeting schedule is a tedious job. Filling in the forms takes lot of time when he travels along with his whole family and two nannies to children. Furthermore, a lot of supporting documents are also to be attached with the visa form that I also have to arrange. Getting visa for nannies is quite difficult, as embassies do not grant visa to nannies easily. Limit gets crossed, when he suddenly changes his travel program. If someone had been working in place of me, he would have lost his patience. I have to search again the flight options. Being rich, he does not mind paying heavy penalty that we have to pay as a change fee. When he reaches abroad, I have to arrange his meet and greet services at the airport and also a car at the airport to take him further at where his hotel was booked and his meetings were to be organized (any better phrase for this). To book this service, agency require me to inform them his travel program 24 hours in advance before he start his travel. As I told you, he keep changes his travel program, some time it gets difficult to arrange these services at a very short notice and I have a habit of not saying “No” to my boss that this could be done because of this reason.
    Coordinating with those illiterate nannies and taking them to embassy is a frustrating task.
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    Re: My travel related work

    Quote Originally Posted by rajan View Post
    My travel-related work


    I want to improve my writing skills. To achieve this end, whatever I face in my everyday life, I try to express some of those situations in words. It is of great help to me, when someone edits
    my writings in this forum. In that serious, I am writing one more paragraph. I am looking forward to seeing it as edited. [space] (I think that the underlined sentence is grammatically incorrect.)

    I take care of my boss
    's travel-related work, not only for him but also for his family. His family includes his wife, two children, and two nannies to children. Sometimes, I find this work very tiresome, as he travels frequently internationally as well as domestically. When I tell this thing to someone that I handle this type of task, that person may take it lightly and may think that it is easy to handle such type of tasks.

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    To handle this type of work, one must have in-depth knowledge of how to complete visa
    -related formalities and other travel-related matters. This job demands that a person should have lot of patience and should have a habit of not losing his nerve when an itinerary is to be arranged at a short notice. That person should also be good at time management. Searching the flights options, in first class or business class, for his visits to multiple countries in line with his meeting schedule is a tedious job. Filling in the forms takes lot of time when he travels along with his whole family and two nannies to children.

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    Furthermore, a lot of supporting documents
    also need to be attached to the visa forms that I also have to arrange. Getting visas for nannies is quite difficult, as embassies do not grant visas to nannies easily. Deadlines get missed when he suddenly changes his plans.

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    Anyone else doing it would lose his patience. I have to search again the flight options again. Being rich, he does not mind paying heavy penalties that we have to pay as a change fee. When he reaches another country, I have to arrange his meet-and-greet services at the airport and also a car at the airport to take him to where his hotel was booked and his meetings were happening. To book this service, agencies require me to inform them of his travel program 24 hours in advance before he start his travel. As I told you, he keep changing his travel program. Sometimes it gets difficult to arrange these services at a very short notice, and I have a habit of not saying no to my boss, that this could not be done because of that reason. Coordinating with those illiterate nannies and taking them to embassies is also a frustrating task.
    When building adjectives, it helps to use hyphens. It makes the meaning clearer.

    Keep paragraphs separate. It also makes the meaning clearer.

    Two nannies for just two kids? Wow. Rich, indeed!

    You're a saint to put up with this guy.
    I'm not a teacher. I speak American English. I've tutored writing at the University of Southern Maine and have done a good deal of copy editing and writing, occasionally for publication.

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    Hi!

    I thank you for editing the paragraph. He is rich indeed. Four PSOs always accompany him for his security.
    Last edited by rajan; 25-Feb-2021 at 17:57.

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    Re: My travel related work

    When you say you "take care of" your boss's travel- related work it is not immediately clear what that means. Perhaps you could say you handle all the details including securing passports and visas, making travel arrangements such as buying airline tickets and other such things.

    When you say it is tiresome I assume you meant tiring or exhausting. (You get paid, don't you?)

    Paragraphs!

    When I first saw that my reaction was "Oh my God!"

    I would have asked you to repost that one paragraph at a time.
    Last edited by Tarheel; 25-Feb-2021 at 23:41. Reason: Insert missing word
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    Re: My travel related work

    Quote Originally Posted by rajan View Post
    In that serious, I am writing one more paragraph.
    What does the underlined part mean?
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: My travel related work

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    What does the underlined part mean?
    I meant to say "in continuation of that"... or "In continuation of my posts in my previous threads" - where I wanted someone to edit my post".
    Last edited by rajan; 25-Feb-2021 at 23:19.

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    Re: My travel related work

    Quote Originally Posted by rajan View Post
    Hi!

    I thank you for editing the paragraph. He is rich indeed! Four PSOs always accompany him as security.
    What's a PSO?
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    Re: My travel related work

    It's only one paragraph if you think paragraphs should be extremely long.
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    Re: My travel related work

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    What's a PSO?
    PSO stands for Personal Security Officer.

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    Re: My travel related work

    Quote Originally Posted by rajan View Post
    PSO stands for Personal Security Officer.
    It's smart to avoid all but the most extremely obvious abreviations. I didn't know what PSO meant, either. Where I live it stands for Portland Symphony Orchestra.

    I've never heard of a personal security officer. We usually say bodyguard. If it's the US president, we say Secret Service agent. Elvis Presley's bodyguards were called the Memphis Mafia.

    I have a feeling your boss's bodyguards are mainly there to protect him from you!
    Last edited by Charlie Bernstein; 26-Feb-2021 at 01:03.
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