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    ...the concussive force...

    Hi there. Would you please proofread the following text? Any help would be appreciated.

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    The sketches made by the six artists were full of useful information, and coupled with the not entirely useless verbal descriptions, gave everyone a good idea of what to expect when they went back to clean up the mess.

    The artists had spread themselves around the valley, one even climbing the central mountain and drawing the whole valley from its peak, a three hundred and sixty-degree panorama.

    Gan poured over the sketches, taking in every detail, and in doing so, could not help but to admire the skill of the artists. They had done as he had asked and drawn what they saw, not what they felt. Each drawing matched the others, though from different angles.

    What was need first was to clean up the ash, wet charcoal, and what turned out to be a sixty-three-metre crater that was almost in the exact centre of the village, so Gan organised some cleanup crews. Gan estimated that the meteor that created the crater would have been about four metres in diameter and made mostly of iron/nickel. Otherwise, it probably would have burned up before impact like the others.

    One good thing was the concussive force of the impact had cleared an almost perfect circle around the crater, which fit in with a few design ideas that Gan was considering.
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    Re: ...the concussive force...

    Quote Originally Posted by rodgers white View Post
    Hi there. Would you please proofread the following text? Any help would be appreciated.

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    The sketches made by the six artists were full of useful information, and coupled with the verbal descriptions, gave everyone a good idea of what to expect when they went back to clean up the mess.

    They knew what to expect. They didn't need sketches.

    The artists had spread themselves around the valley, one even climbing the central mountain and drawing the whole valley from its peak, a three hundred and sixty-degree panorama.

    Gan pored over the sketches, taking in every detail, and in doing so, could not help but to admire the skill of the artists. They had done as he had asked and drew what they saw, not what they felt. Each drawing matched the others, though from different angles.

    What was needed first was to clean up the ash, wet charcoal, and what turned out to be a sixty-three-metre crater that was almost in the exact centre of the village, so Gan organised some cleanup crews. Gan estimated that the meteor that created the crater would have been about four metres in diameter and made mostly of iron/nickel. Otherwise, it probably would have burned up before impact like the others.

    One good thing was the concussive force of the impact had cleared an almost perfect circle around the crater, which fit in with a few design ideas that Gan was considering.
    It's the size of the object that determines whether it's big enough to make an impact.

    Is Gan an architect?
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    Re: ...the concussive force...

    --Is Gan an architect?
    --Yeah, kind of.
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    Re: ...the concussive force...

    There's nothing Gan can't do, is there?
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