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    alpacinoutd is offline Key Member
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    Jessica turned on the light, her eyes squinting and adjusting.

    Is this correct and natural?

    Jessica turned on the light, her eyes squinting and adjusting. The mad woman rushed towards the room, shaking her head. "No light. You turn them on and no more food," she said flicking off the light. The room sank into black. Jessica stepped back, cowering in the stinking darkness in the corner of the room. She closed her eyes and began counting again, finding herself unable to continue after a few seconds. A fog was beginning to envelop her mind.

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    Re: Jessica turned on the light, her eyes squinting and adjusting.

    It's OK, but I might say squinting and adjusting to the brightness or something like that.
    Not a professional teacher

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