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    alpacinoutd is offline Key Member
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    Are these similes correct and natural?

    Are these similes correct and natural?

    1. She came out of the bathroom, as fresh as an October rain.

    2. Her smile was as refreshing as the autumn's first rain.

    3. The look in her eyes was as cold as a February snow.

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    Re: Are these similes correct and natural?

    True! I don't think anyone would call October rain fresh here. More likely: biting, bitter, bone-chilling, brain-numbing, bleak. October is a B month, for sure.

    It has gotten milder the past few years. But I don't think it's graduated to fresh yet!

    But if the scene takes place in a warmer place, then fresh is fine.
    Last edited by Charlie Bernstein; 23-Mar-2021 at 15:34.
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