alpacinou
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- Sep 30, 2019
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- Iran
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Patrick William looked out the window of his presidential suite at Hilton in Honolulu. The shimmer of the sun swayed on the waves along with the surfers. Patrick decided to walk from his hotel to the beach. Strong winds ran off the sea making the air heavy and humid. The salt in the air stung his eyes, coating his tongue. The rivulets of sweat ran down his forehead faster as he got closer to the sea. He decided to go for a dip. As he squatted down to untie the laces of his two-thousand-dollar Italian shoes, he heard a woman screaming her lungs out. Patrick quickly took off his shoe and ran towards the water only to see blood and foam merge on top of the waves, crashing on sand.
Patrick William looked out the window of his presidential suite at Hilton in Honolulu. The shimmer of the sun swayed on the waves along with the surfers. Patrick decided to walk from his hotel to the beach. Strong winds ran off the sea making the air heavy and humid. The salt in the air stung his eyes, coating his tongue. The rivulets of sweat ran down his forehead faster as he got closer to the sea. He decided to go for a dip. As he squatted down to untie the laces of his two-thousand-dollar Italian shoes, he heard a woman screaming her lungs out. Patrick quickly took off his shoe and ran towards the water only to see blood and foam merge on top of the waves, crashing on sand.