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    My favorite time of the day

    My favorite time of the day

    Let me introduce my favorite time of the day.
    It’s the evening.
    In the evening, first I have dinner with my family.
    Then, I play with my younger sister.
    We play together (like) doing hide and seek, playing a board game, or drawing.

    1.Especially, both she and I like drawing with iPAD.
    2.Both she and I especially like drawing with iPAD.
    3.More than anything else/above all, Both she and I like drawing with iPAD.

    I show her what I drew.
    Then, I explain to her how I drew.
    After playing with her, I usually play computer games.
    I’m happiest when I play them/computer games.
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    1. Does (like) have to be removed or does it work?
    2. Which is the best among 1, 2, and 3?
    3. Does it have to be "them"? Or does it sound natural?

    Or if you have some parts wrong, please correct them.
    Last edited by keannu; 02-Apr-2021 at 03:53.

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    Re: My favorite time of the day

    Quote Originally Posted by keannu View Post
    My favorite time of the day

    Let me introduce tell you [about] my favorite time of the day.
    It’s the evening. In the evening, first I have dinner with my family no full stop here then no comma here I play with my younger sister. We play together (like) doing things like hide and seek or playing a board games, or drawing or we draw.

    1. Especially, both she and I like drawing with iPAD on an iPad.
    2. Both she and I We especially particularly like drawing with iPAD on an iPad.
    3. More than anything else /above all, both she and I we like drawing with iPAD on an iPad.

    I show her what I drew have drawn no full stop here then no comma here I explain to her how I drew it. After playing with her that, I usually play computer games. I’m happiest when I play them/computer games. I'm doing that.

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    1. Does (like) have to be removed or does it work? "Like" on its own was wrong. See above.
    2. Which is the best among 1, 2, and 3? With my corrections, #2 is my favourite.
    3. Does it have to be "them"? Or Does it sound natural? If a pronoun were natural, "them" would be the right one because it needs to refer to "computer games". However, as you can see above, it's not a natural way to express it.

    Or if you have some If any parts are wrong, please correct them.
    Note my corrections (in red) and comments (in blue) above. There was no need for "Both she and I" either time. You had already mentioned yourself and your sister so, from then on, you should use "we".
    Last edited by emsr2d2; 03-Apr-2021 at 10:05.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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