alpacinou
Key Member
- Joined
- Sep 30, 2019
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- Native Language
- Persian
- Home Country
- Iran
- Current Location
- Iran
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Patrick opened the door and walked inside the villa screened by tall trees. He walked past the lush trees to see a vast expanse of barren land to the east of the villa. The soil was cracked and it looked like it'd been plowed a long time ago, dry furrows running vertically along its length. Patrick sat by one of the furrows, enjoying the sun on his skin. A black insect was crawling in the furrow, its feelers moving. Patrick heard an engine come to life in the distant and a few minutes later saw water flowing slowly alongside the channels, shimmering in the sun. The black insect was taken by the water, trying to keep itself afloat, flailing helplessly. After a few minutes, it succumbed to water, plunging in the small stream.
Patrick opened the door and walked inside the villa screened by tall trees. He walked past the lush trees to see a vast expanse of barren land to the east of the villa. The soil was cracked and it looked like it'd been plowed a long time ago, dry furrows running vertically along its length. Patrick sat by one of the furrows, enjoying the sun on his skin. A black insect was crawling in the furrow, its feelers moving. Patrick heard an engine come to life in the distant and a few minutes later saw water flowing slowly alongside the channels, shimmering in the sun. The black insect was taken by the water, trying to keep itself afloat, flailing helplessly. After a few minutes, it succumbed to water, plunging in the small stream.