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    The garden was surrounded by a brick wall.

    Is this correct and natural?

    The garden was surrounded by a brick wall. In the corner stood a red berry tree. The tree branches were laden with fruits, drooping towards the light blue-tiled ground which was dappled dark red by the carpet of trampled red berries.

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    Re: The garden was surrounded by a brick wall.

    Is the ground light with blue tiles, or are the tiles light blue?
    Remove the final "red". It's not necessary after saying the ground was red.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: The garden was surrounded by a brick wall.

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    Is the ground light with blue tiles, or are the tiles light blue?
    Remove the final "red". It's not necessary after saying the ground was red.
    The tiles are light blue. How should I say it?

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    Re: The garden was surrounded by a brick wall.

    You need to use something like "... drooping towards the light blue floor tiles ...".

    Using "light blue floor tiles" makes it clear that "light blue" is the colour.
    Using "light, blue floor tiles" would mean that the tiles were light (in weight) and blue (in colour).
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    Re: The garden was surrounded by a brick wall.

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    You need to use something like "... drooping towards the light blue floor tiles ...".

    Using "light blue floor tiles" makes it clear that "light blue" is the colour.
    Using "light, blue floor tiles" would mean that the tiles were light (in weight) and blue (in colour).
    Can I use "floor" for garden?

    Is this completely okay?

    The garden was surrounded by a brick wall. In the corner stood a red berry tree. The tree branches were laden with fruits, drooping towards the light blue floor tiles which was dappled dark red by the carpet of trampled berries.

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    Re: The garden was surrounded by a brick wall.

    Quote Originally Posted by alpacinoutd View Post
    Can I use "floor" for garden? Not really, no. However, some parts of a garden can be tiled. That part is usually called a patio so they would be patio tiles.

    Is this completely okay?

    The garden was surrounded by a brick wall. In the corner stood a red berry tree. The tree branches were laden with fruits, drooping towards the light blue floor tiles which was were dappled dark red by the carpet of trampled berries.
    See above.

    I don't find "dappled" natural with "the carpet of". The latter suggests that the dark red covers almost every bit of the tiles. "Dappled" is more sparse.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: The garden was surrounded by a brick wall.

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    See above.

    I don't find "dappled" natural with "the carpet of". The latter suggests that the dark red covers almost every bit of the tiles. "Dappled" is more sparse.
    Try stained.
    I'm not a teacher. I speak American English. I've tutored writing at the University of Southern Maine and have done a good deal of copy editing and writing, occasionally for publication.

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