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    Jane went to the kitchen

    Is this correct and natural?

    Jane went to the kitchen and came back with a glass of bourbon. Her friends whooped and hollered as she raised the glass with both hands as if it were a sports trophy. She searched the dark room for Harry, her gaze settling on him. "You know what I want Harry?"

    "Let me hear it."

    "I want to dance on bourbon. I want to dance the night away on bourbon."
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    Re: Jane went to the kitchen

    Quote Originally Posted by alpacinoutd View Post
    Is this correct and natural?

    Jane went to the kitchen and came back with a glass of bourbon. Her friends whooped and hollered as she raised the glass with both hands as if it were a sports trophy. She searched the dark room for Harry, her gaze settling on him. "You know what I want, Harry?"

    "Let's hear it."

    "I want to dance on bourbon. I want to dance the night away on bourbon."
    Nope, sorry. We use on when we talk about being on drugs, but we don't use on for booze.

    No one knows why.
    I'm not a teacher. I speak American English. I've tutored writing at the University of Southern Maine and have done a good deal of copy editing and writing, occasionally for publication.

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    Re: Jane went to the kitchen

    If bourbon has some perceived intoxicating qualities not found in, say, gin or vodka, the preposition sounds OK to me.

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    Re: Jane went to the kitchen

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    Nope, sorry. We use on when we talk about being on drugs, but we don't use on for booze.

    No one knows why.
    How can I fix it? What words should I use to make that work?

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    Re: Jane went to the kitchen

    drinking/full of

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    Re: Jane went to the kitchen

    Quote Originally Posted by Tdol View Post
    drinking/full of
    Is this okay?

    "I want to dance full of bourbon. I want to dance the night away full of bourbon."

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    Re: Jane went to the kitchen

    It might be more compelling as something like "I want to dance the night away in a bourbon-fuelled haze!"

    Going back to the use of "on" with alcohol, it can be used. In BrE, we say things like "Uh oh. Grandma's on the gin again!" and "You've tripped over three times since breakfast. Have you been on the vodka?" As you can see, it's "on + the + name of alcohol".
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Jane went to the kitchen

    Or non-specific terms for drinking in general- on the lash/piss/sauce, etc.

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    Re: Jane went to the kitchen

    I think it's fine to use on Bourbon in the context of the OP if the idea is that she's behaving under Bourbon's particular effect.

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    Re: Jane went to the kitchen

    Quote Originally Posted by Tdol View Post
    If bourbon has some perceived intoxicating qualities not found in, say, gin or vodka, the preposition sounds OK to me.
    It doesn't.
    I'm not a teacher. I speak American English. I've tutored writing at the University of Southern Maine and have done a good deal of copy editing and writing, occasionally for publication.

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