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    Any errors

    Can you tell me if there are any error in these sentence?

    While we saw the Panthers soccer game we realized the players were yelling and howling throughout the whole game.

    While sightseeing in New Orleans, he always had to stop for the bathroom places to eat and places to shop. Needless to say I didnít like the trip because I was very bored.

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    Re: Any errors

    Quote Originally Posted by Mae
    Can you tell me if there are any error in these sentence?

    While we saw the Panthers soccer game we realized the players were yelling and howling throughout the whole game.

    While sightseeing in New Orleans, he always had to stop for the bathroom places to eat and places to shop. Needless to say I didnít like the trip because I was very bored.
    I'd say 'while we were watching....' I don't see the need for 'whole' with 'throughout'.

    In the second, I'd say 'he was always stopping' and put a comma after 'bathroom'. 'Enjoy' sounds betrter to me than 'like' in the last sentence.

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    Re: Any errors

    Quote Originally Posted by Mae
    Can you tell me if there are any error in these sentence?

    While we saw the Panthers soccer game we realized the players were yelling and howling throughout the whole game.

    While sightseeing in New Orleans, he always had to stop for the bathroom places to eat and places to shop. Needless to say I didnít like the trip because I was very bored.
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    • Can you tell me if there are any error in these sentences?

      When we watched the Panthers soccer game we realized that the players were yelling and howling throughout the game.

      While sightseeing in New Orleans, he always had to stop to go to the bathroom at places to eat and at places to shop. I didn't like the trip, because I was very bored.


    Note: The phrase "needless to say" adds nothing to the last sentence. Indeed, it rarely -- if ever -- adds anything to a sentence.

    (Thanks, Tdol.)

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    Re: Any errors

    Quote Originally Posted by Mae
    Can you tell me if there are any error in these sentence?

    While we saw the Panthers soccer game we realized the players were yelling and howling throughout the whole game.

    While sightseeing in New Orleans, he always had to stop for the bathroom places to eat and places to shop. Needless to say I didnít like the trip because I was very bored.
    Try:
    • Can you tell me if there are any error in these sentences?

      When we watched the Panthers soccer game we realized that the players were yelling and howling throughout the game.

      While sightseeing in New Orleans, he always had to stop to go to the bathroom at places to eat and at places to shop. I didn't like the trip, because I was very bored.


    Note: The phrase "needless to say" adds nothing to the last sentence. Indeed, it rarely -- if ever -- adds anything to a sentence.

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