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  1. Kaleena

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    Can you help me correct this sentance?
    Rainsford picked up a sword that was nearby and swung it at General Zaroff. The first time he missed but the second time directly into Zaroff's stomach.
    Thankyou so much1 I hope you can help!

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    Re: Help Me Please

    The first sentence is OK. The second sentence should be: His first swing missed, but on the second swing, the sword went directly into Zaroff's stomach.

  2. Junior Member
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    Re: Help Me Please

    May I suggest:
    I think the wound from "swinging" a sword would be a cut. Perhaps on the second effort the sword "plunged" into his stomach.



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