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    #1

    letter

    Hi, could someone please tell me if there is any grammar mistake in the text below?

    This is to inform you that the sports day is going to be held on Wednesday, 20th December, 2006. All children will come in white t-shirts and white trouser with green caps. On the 16th, 17th and 18th of December the children will come to school in order to brighten up their practices.

    Your cooperation in this regard will be highly appreciated.

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    #2

    Re: letter

    This is to inform you that Sports Day is going to be held on Wednesday, December 20th, 2006. All children should come to school dressed in white t-shirts, white trousers and green caps. On the 16th, 17th, and 18th of December the children will be in school to practice for their Sports Day activities.


    This is just my opinion of how I would correct your writing. Other teachers will have slightly different corrections.

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    #3

    Re: letter

    Hello Asad

    I would suggest:

    ____

    This is to inform you that Sports Day will be held on Wednesday, 20th December, 2006. All children should attend in white t-shirts and white trousers with green caps. On the 16th, 17th and 18th of December all children should attend school for training.

    Your cooperation in this matter will be greatly appreciated.

    ____

    (By the way, are you sure you want to put your address under "location"? You may receive some unusual mail!)

    All the best,

    MrP


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    #4

    Re: letter

    thanks mykwyner!!!


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    #5

    Re: letter

    I have edited it, MrPedantic.
    Thanks for your help.

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