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    needs revision!

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    I am writing this letter to inform you about the marriage of you and Prince Humperdink. In my opinion you donít have the right to get married to him. Prince Humperdink is a man who is in control and gets what he wants, whenever he wants, Prince Humperdink
    Is not the right man for you. You are too pretty to get involved with such a rotten man.
    He has told you lies all along. When he captured you coming out of Fire Swamp, he promised you that Westly will be brought back on his ship, those were all lies. Westley is taken off to the fifth level of the Zoo of Death to be tortured by the Prince's advisor Count Rugen. The reason for him doing this is so that he wouldnít come back for you, so that the wedding wouldnít be called off. He is planning to kill you on the night of your wedding. It was all Humperdinkís idea of hiring Vizzini to kidnap and murder you in order to justify a war with Guilder. Buttercup trust me on this one, donít marry the Prince.

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    Re: needs revision!

    Quote Originally Posted by Unregistered View Post
    Help revise this please:

    I am writing this letter to advise you about your forthcoming marriage to Prince Humperdink. In my opinion it would be wrong for you to get married to him. Prince Humperdink is a man who needs to be in control and always gets what he wants, whenever he wants... that's Prince Humperdink
    He is not the right man for you. You are far too pretty to get involved with such a rotten man.
    He has told you lies all along. When he captured you as you came out of the Fire Swamp, he promised you that Westly would be brought back on his ship... that was a lie. Westley has been taken to the fifth level of the Zoo of Death to be tortured by the Prince's advisor Count Rugen. He has done this in order to prevent him coming back for you, and to make sure that the wedding couldn't be called off. He is planning to kill you on the night of your wedding. It was Humperdink’s idea to hire Vizzini to kidnap and murder you in order to justify a war with Guilder... Buttercup, trust me on this one, don’t marry the Prince.
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