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    is the following power paragraph is correct,edit if it is needed

    I learned some interesting facts about Abraham Lincoln from David A Alders's
    "A picture book of Abraham Lincoln".
    First, he was born on 1809, Feb 12th in Kentucky. His parents are Thomas Lincoln
    and Nancy Hanks and he had an elder sister named Sarah.
    Next, when he was an adult he became the 16th President of United States in
    March 1861. He also led the country through civiliwar and abolished slavery.
    Finally, I picked a book to read about Abraham Lincoln.He proved a poor man could become a president and the most important he kept our nation together.In conclusion Abraham Lincoln was the greatest president of unites states of America.


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    Re: is the following power paragraph is correct,edit if it is needed

    Quote Originally Posted by swapna View Post
    I learned some interesting facts about Abraham Lincoln from David A Alders's
    "A picture book of Abraham Lincoln".
    First, he was born on 1809, Feb 12th in Kentucky. His parents are Thomas Lincoln
    and Nancy Hanks and he had an elder sister named Sarah.
    Next, when he was an adult he became the 16th President of United States in
    March 1861. He also led the country through civiliwar and abolished slavery.
    Finally, I picked a book to read about Abraham Lincoln.He proved a poor man could become a president and the most important he kept our nation together.In conclusion Abraham Lincoln was the greatest president of unites states of America.

    Getting there - a few errors still.


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    Re: is the following power paragraph is correct,edit if it is needed

    I have learnt some interesting facts about Abraham Lincoln from David A Alders's
    "A picture book of Abraham Lincoln".
    First, he was born on, Feb 12th 1809 in Kentucky. His parents were Thomas Lincoln
    and Nancy Hanks. He also had an elder sister named Sarah.
    Next, when he was an adult he became the 16th President of United States in
    March 1861. He also led the country through civilwar and abolished slavery.
    Finally, I picked a book to read about Abraham Lincoln.He proved that a poor man could become a president and most importantly he kept our nation together.In conclusion Abraham Lincoln was the greatest president of the united states of America.

    I think that just changing it slighty as i have above, makes it flow smoother. Hope this helps.

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