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    is this a good introduction to an essay?

    This is an argumentative essay introduction about john brown, and I'm not really good at essays so i need some advice on this introduction and whether or not it has a clear thesis or not. here is it:

    Americans tend to have different opinions on whether a person is a good martyr or a bad martyr. John Brown has his fans and his haters. Brown was something you did not see much of in the eighteenth century; he was a strong slavery abolitionist. He went on a mission to free slaves, but the mission ended with people dead. Despite this negative element, John Brown should be recognized as an American hero and a martyr, who was trying to give freedom to people who deserved it.


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    Re: is this a good introduction to an essay?

    The last sentence is drawing conclusions before you have been through the positive and negative sides.

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    Re: is this a good introduction to an essay?

    I understand your thesis is: John Brown should be recognized as an American hero and a martyr.

    That seems clear enough to me.

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    #4

    Re: is this a good introduction to an essay?

    In that case, it might be better to move that to the start with something like even though after it.

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    Re: is this a good introduction to an essay?

    Quote Originally Posted by niaaa View Post
    This is an argumentative essay introduction about John Brown, and I'm not really good at essays so I need some advice on this introduction and whether or not it has a clear thesis or not. Here is it it is:
    See above. Remember to use correct capitalisation in all your writing, not just in your essays.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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