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    This passage is meant for Year 2 students. Please edit it for me. Thanks in advance.

    Do animals talk to one another? Yes, but they do not talk the same way as people do. They express feelings to one another by using movements, smells and sounds. A honeybee does a kind of dance to tell other honeybees where to find nectar. A female wolf gives off a certain smell that lets a male wolf know she ready to mate. These are the ways that animals do to ‘talk’ to one another. Another animal of the same kind can understand the feeling or idea expressed.

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    Re: lshort passage

    Quote Originally Posted by kohyoongliat View Post
    This passage is meant for Year 2 students. Please edit it for me. Thanks in advance.

    Do animals talk to one another? Yes, but they do not talk the same way as people do. They express feelings to one another by using movements, smells and sounds. A honeybee does a kind of dance to tell other honeybees where to find nectar. A female wolf gives off a certain smell that lets a male wolf know she is ready to mate. These are the ways that animals use to ‘talk’ to one another. Another animal of the same kind can understand the feeling or idea expressed.
    I think it is very well written. Those are the only mistakes I found.

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    Re: lshort passage

    queenbu's corrections look good to me as well.

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    Re: short passage

    Quote Originally Posted by queenbu View Post
    I think it is very well written. Those are the only mistakes I found.
    Many thanks for correcting the errors. I appreciate it very much.

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