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    #1

    proofreading

    Hi,

    could you please proofread the following text: (especially the highlighted parts)

    The Supplier undertakes to ensure service at the place of software use within 10 days at the most on the basis of the client’s prior written request, within the frame of the price according to paragraph 4 hereof. The number of days stipulated in this provision shall include each day of service, including commenced days. The Supplier undertakes to start the service action according to this provision not later than within ten business days of receipt of the cleint’s written request for service.

    Thank you very much.

    Hanka

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    #2

    Re: proofreading

    'Service action', though the meaning is clear, sounds a little strange to me- have you seen it used in contracts?


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    #3

    Re: proofreading

    No, I didn´t. Do you think that I should use only "service"? And the rest of the text is OK?

    Thank you.

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    #4

    Re: proofreading

    I think you could drop 'action'. The rest is OK.

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