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    Passage for Year 2 students

    This passage is meant for Year 2 students. Could someone please edit it for me. Any suggestions to improve the passage are welcome. Thanks in advance.

    Ricky was walking to the playground when he saw a coin on the ground. He picked it up and saw that there was a blue spot on it. He wanted to return it to the owner but there was no one around.

    As he was walking home, he saw a beggar, so he dropped the coin into his bowl. The beggar said, “Thank you, little boy.”

    The next day, Ricky’s mother asked him to buy some cans of food. He went to the provision shop. He asked the shopkeeper, “How much do they cost?” “Six dollars,’ said the shopkeeper. Ricky gave him ten dollars and the shopkeeper gave him four dollars in coins as change.

    Ricky looked at one of the coins carefully. To his surprise, it was the coin with a blue spot, which he had given to the beggar. He decided to keep it because he believed that it was a lucky coin.

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    Re: Passage for Year 2 students

    Do you say 'provision shop' in Singapore? As a BrE sp[eaker, I'd use grocer's.
    Ricky looked at one of the coins carefully.- This sentence sounds a bit weird to me; wouldn't he either look at all, or simply notice the blue spot and then look at it more closely?

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    Re: Passage for Year 2 students

    Hi Tdol

    'Provision shop' is commonly used in Singapore. I believe it has been wrongly used. Your comment that he should have noticed the blue spot first is logical to me.

    Thanks.
    Last edited by kohyoongliat; 27-Mar-2007 at 09:15.

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    Re: Passage for Year 2 students

    I didn't mean that it was wrong; if that is the term used in Singapore, it's fine to me, but it would sound strange in London, just like drugstore from American English.

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    Re: Passage for Year 2 students

    Hi Tidol

    I only accept British and American English. If 'provision shop' is coined by Singaporeans, I would not accept it because, unlike BrE and AmE, Singapore English is not recognised internationally.

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