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    short passage

    This passage is meant for Year 2 students. Please edit it for me. Any suggestions to improve the passage are welcome.

    Pauline’s hobby is stamp-collecting. She has stamps from different countries which she buys from shops all over Singapore. her house. She also collects Singapore stamps. Sometimes she exchanges stamps with her friends. In this way, she has a wide variety of stamps.

    She puts all her stamps neatly in an album. She is proud of her collection of stamps. Whenever she is free, she will look at the stamps.
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    Re: short passage

    her house.- Not sure what it's doing here.
    Singapore stamps- Singaporean?
    she exchanges stamps- swaps sounds more natural to me
    she has a wide variety of stamps- I'd put a verb in there like 'has acquired'
    Whenever she is free, she will look- How about 'she looks'?

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    #3

    Re: short passage

    Thanks, Tdol, for your comments. "Her house" was a careless mistake. It shouldn't be in the passage.

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    #4

    Re: short passage

    I assumed that it was copy and paste or something.

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    Re: short passage

    You're right. I've a soft copy on Word and copy and pasted the passage.

    Thanks. once again.

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