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    which one is better?

    • Shoppers in sporting goods stores, unlike those in department stores, do very little impulse shopping, do not buy a pair of skis and a boomerang when they come in for a basketball, but leave with only a basketball .


    • Shoppers in sporting goods stores, unlike those in department stores, do very little impulse shopping; someone who comes in for a basketball will leave with a basketball only and not buy a pair of skis and a boomerang as well.
    which one of the sentences is better?
    thanks

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    #2

    Re: which one is better?

    i suggest this one:

    Shoppers in sporting goods stores, unlike those in department stores, do very little impulse shopping, like leaving with only a basketball but not a pair of skis and a boomerang when they come in for a basketball.

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    Re: which one is better?

    How about either of these:

    Shoppers in sporting goods stores, unlike those in department stores, do very little impulse shopping; they do not, for example, leave with a pair of skis, a boomerang, and a basketball when they came in solely to buy a basketball.

    Shoppers in sporting goods stores, unlike those in department stores, do very little impulse shopping; they do not, for example, pick up a pair of skis and a boomerang when they come in only to buy a basketball.


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