"In twenty years, we will be living in a better world. Progress is something that cannot be stopped." Agree or disagree.
I agree with this statement. To begin with, I need to make a clear
viewpoint of (I think it should be "on") what I think a better world needs. A better world
must consists of well-developed civilizations and high technologies.
It is no doubt that these two requirements are still proceeding; indeed,
they are something we can't stop.
First, in twenty years, most of communities and countries will be
well civilized. It is obviously that such a process is unstoppable; for
example, during the past few years, the world's agricultural industry
has significantly improved, not to mention the population densities. The
Agricultural Departments, which have investigated a variety of tools for
farming usages, have provided them to the farmers.
Last, in twenty years, the world's technology developments will
approach to their high, or reach to ( we say "to rech something" not "to reach to something") a breaking point. The Growing speed of
computer technology for an example, the techniques of software
programming, webpage designing, internet accessing and windows
developing have grown dramatically. Another example, after the
astronaut, Armstrong, conquered the moon, the United States has
been setting their target on the Mars, and a spaceship will be sent
within twenty years!
In conclusion, civilizations and technologies are what make a better
world; although the developing process on both elements have ( the verb here refers to the "process of developing". It should be singular "has") their
advantages as well as their disadvantages, the developments can not
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