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    Talking pls, correct my resume!!^^

    I have made a resume to apply a position of early childhood teacher in korea.
    I am afraid I will have some mistakes
    Pls, correct them as much as u can.
    I will appreciate ur help forever.^^


    I have just graduated advanced diploma children’s service in Australia, and I have a diploma of fashion design, which will be advantageous in the visual art area. Also, I have professional skills and effective English skills, which were obtained from numerous practices, studies, therefore I assure that I am able to be a delightful and appropriate person for this position. I have not only abundant love and care but also respect and understand children. And I am planning to work on a bachelor degree in early childhood education to consistently develop my knowledge and to provide more quality education to children.

    To work on full time position in a early childhood setting that places values on learning through play, self expression, and allowing the implementation of quality early childhood curriculum.

    lChildren’s Services with Advanced Diploma 06.2006 ~ 03.2007
    MEGT College – Sydney, Australia
    lChildren’s Services with Certificate III 06.2005 ~ 06.2006
    TAFE NSW – Sydney, Australia
    lSenior First Aid Certificate 21.09.2005
    TAFE NSW – Sydney, Australia
    Completed the Senior First Aid course
    lIELTS Preparation program 10.2004 ~ 12.2004
    St.Marks institution – Sydney, Australia
    lESL Program
    01.10.2003 ~ 19.12.2003
    EAC international language center – Manila, Philippines
    Awarded “Excellent Student”
    Illustration School holiday program 07.2000 ~ 08.2000
    Kook Jae Fashion intuition – Seoul, Korea
    Fashion Design with Diploma 03.1998 ~ 02.2001
    Kyung Won College – Kyung Gi, Korea
    Awarded “ Wining a prize” in J-PAINT (Illustration software) Contest

    Retail Assistant – Sydney, Australia 09.2005 ~ 02.2007
    Hanama Collection Co., Ltd: Operated a business under franchise of Valley Girl Co., Ltd
    Managed low price garments and accessories

    Agent (Sales assistant) – Seoul, Korea 04.2001 ~ 06.2003
    Storia Trading Co., Ltd: Trading agency
    Operated a business with exclusive license of ‘RODEL’, ‘VISCONF’ (ITALY)
    Managed high price woven jacket and wool, fur coat

    Mother’s Love Childcare centre 30.10.2006 ~ 10.11.2006
    Burwood, Sydney, Australia
    Burwood childcare centre
    01.08.2006 ~ 01.09.2006
    Burwood, Sydney, Australia
    lConcord west Long day care center 22.05.2006 ~ 09.06.2006
    Concord west, Sydney, Australia
    ABC Little Gumtree
    17.10.2005 ~ 04.11.2005
    Concord west, Sydney, Australia

    Working Holiday 03.2004 ~ 02.2005
    Brisbane and Sydney, Australia
    2002 Youth Passes 01.08.2002~ 06.08.2002
    Dae Gu to Jin Ju , Korea

    I have intermediate grade computer skill such as Ms - Word, PowerPoint, Excel and I certificated in Senior First Aid. Also, I have skilled in visual art such as drawing and painting. Any challenges that I might be confronted with are truly welcomed.

    • Join Date: Jun 2007
    • Posts: 9

    Re: pls, correct my resume!!^^

    - I don't think you can be a delightful candidate for a job, meaning that 'delightful' does not fit the applying for job kind of register

    - also to work full time instead of to work on full time position

    - an early - not a early

    - I am not so sure about placing values on something, you might want to go with laying emphasis on

    - I have skilled - I have skills

    - are truly welcomed - are truly welcome

    These are the ones I picked out, I did not go through the employment history section as this one would invlove some payment anyway, you could work on your formal register more, other than that, it was pretty decent

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