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    proofreading

    Hi,

    could you please proofread the following text:

    1) The purpose of each corporate organization is to perform or, as the case may be, produce, in the shortest possible time, what customers really need in the specified time. But which organization really guarantees optimization of the enterprise benefit?
    2) At the same time, enterprises must provide for organiziational management of tasks which are always complex.

    Thank you very much.

    Hanka

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    Re: proofreading

    Quote Originally Posted by Hanka View Post
    Hi,

    could you please proofread the following text:

    1) The purpose of each corporate organization is to perform or, as the case may be, produce what customers really need in the shortest amount of time. But which (what) organization really does guarantee optimization of the enterprise benefit?
    2) At the same time, enterprises must provide for (ensure the all-round??) organiziational management of tasks (goals??) , which are always complex.

    Thank you very much.

    Hanka

    have I changed too much??


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    Re: proofreading

    It is OK! Thank you! But one little question In the first sentece there are two phrases concerning time and in your sentece one of them is missing Maybe my word order was not correct The sentence says that each corporate organization must perform or produce what the customer really needs at a particular moment and must do so in the shortest possible time.

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    Re: proofreading

    1) The purpose of each corporate organization is to perform or, as the case may be, produce what customers really need at the moment and within the shortest amount of time /at short notice / promptly. But which (what) organization really does guarantee optimization of the enterprise benefit?
    2) At the same time, enterprises must provide for (ensure the all-round??) organiziational management of tasks, which are always complex.

    what about this?

    or: at a certain moment?
    Last edited by bianca; 22-Jun-2007 at 15:04.


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    Re: proofreading

    Great! Thanks a lot! You are my adviser for today Could I ask you to check the following? As noone has replied...

    https://www.usingenglish.com/forum/a...ofreading.html

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