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    #1

    I need help with analysis of this writing.

    I am a new member of this site, so I am not familiar with everything here.
    But, I just post a writing for all teachers to help me analyze. The writing is below:

    I am very sorry I couldnít go to your party last week, I knew you stilled angry to me, if I donít tell you about reason. Last week it was a bad day for me because my cousin was sick and she was shaking all the time, at the moment her mother went to the market and her father went to work so I payed a little time to help her by I called to my uncle and then took her to the hospital. When her mother arrived home she asked me to take care her child a day, I wanted to help her so I didnít have the choice. If you were me I thought you would do that, so I decided this choice.

    So I wanted you to forgive me. I think you will stop angry to me because it is the reason that I didnít go to your party. I donít have choice because itís related to the age of someone. I know you are very kind and responsible.

    I hope you lucky although.
    Write to me soon if you forgive me.

    Love,
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    #2

    Re: I need help with analysis of this writing.

    first of all, you have to tell us how you want the piece of writing to be analised... is it just to correct the grammar mistakes? what is the focus of the analysis?

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    Re: I need help with analysis of this writing.

    Suggestions/corrections in blue.

    Quote Originally Posted by linemean View Post
    I am very sorry I couldnít go to your party last week, I knew you stilled angry to me, if I donít tell you about reason. Last week it was a bad day for me because my cousin was sick and she was shaking all the time, at the moment her mother went to the market and her father went to work so I payed a little time to help her by I called to my uncle and then took her to the hospital. When her mother arrived home she asked me to take care her child a day, I wanted to help her so I didnít have the choice. If you were me I thought you would do that, so I decided this choice.

    So I wanted you to forgive me. I think you will stop angry to me because it is the reason that I didnít go to your party. I donít have choice because itís related to the age of someone. I know you are very kind and responsible.

    I hope you lucky although.
    Write to me soon if you forgive me.


    Love,
    I am very sorry I couldn't go to your party last week, but my cousin was sick, and I had to take her to the hospital.


    Love,

    Linemean
    ~R


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