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  1. help_guest
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    Smile sentence correction

    Please help me correct this sentence
    Original draft:
    In this form all pending resignations of Employees coming under this particular Line Manager will be displayed,

    Changed:
    When a user selects a particular LM, this form displays all the pending resignation requests of employees who report to that LM.

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    Re: sentence correction

    Bravo! Some people might object to 'this form displays'; you could avoid that problem by saying 'this form shows' or 'this form lists'. Otherwise, your rewrite is a great improvement.

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