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    Conclusion/ confirm

    I would be grateful if someone help to comment/ modify the following sentence.
    The purpose of sentence meaning is to confirm the instruction/ result after coordination with manager. I want to use sentence 2 in my letter because of more polite.

    1.)I would like to confirm you that the fan will be control zone A.

    2.)I have a conclusion regarding the fan will be control zone A after discussing with you on 18 Jan 2007

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    Re: Conclusion/ confirm

    1.)I would like to confirm with you that the fan will be in control zone A as we discussed on 18 January, 2007.

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    Re: Conclusion/ confirm

    Quote Originally Posted by mykwyner View Post
    1.)I would like to confirm with you that the fan will be in control zone A as we discussed on 18 January, 2007.
    WOuld you mind comment / modify on sentence 2?

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    Re: Conclusion/ confirm

    Yes. Sentence 2. is unacceptable. You may think it is more polite, but it is awkward and very difficult to understand. Change it to my version of your sentence 1. I have written thousands of business letters, and that's how one should sound. The best way to be polite to your reader is to write in a style that is clear and easy to understand.

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