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    behaviour

    Hi native speakers,
    Pls proofread the following sentence.


    Teenagers should not go to pubs because they may meet bad people in there and may learn their bad behaviour, such as taking drugs

    Sukiyaki


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    Re: behaviour

    Quote Originally Posted by Unregistered View Post
    Hi native speakers,
    Pls proofread the following sentence.


    Teenagers should not go to pubs because they may meet bad people in there and may learn their bad behaviour, such as taking drugs

    Sukiyaki
    The sentence is not bad as written but it could be shorter. "In there" is unnecessary as it is obvious that you are referring to a pub environment and the second "may" is unnecessary as well.

    Teenagers should not go to pubs because they may meet bad people and learn their bad behaviour, such as taking drugs.

    I don't like the "such as taking drugs" at the end.
    Though grammatically it is fine but I cannot think of a better way of saying it right now.

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