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  1. jabi
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    CD Cover

    Hi,

    We're a Swiss band. We will release a CD this month. We some English phrases in our booklet. It would be great, if some of you could read it and let us know, if there are mistakes (punctuation, spelling, sense, ...).

    The texts may be found on this two cover-images:





    Is it ok to use capital letters in titles, e.g. Pack you Bags.

    Thanks a lot!

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    Re: CD Cover

    I'll point this towards our staff and let them reply...
    I'm not a teacher, so please consider any advice I give in that context.


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    Re: CD Cover

    "we've put into the creation..."

    "we feel confident that..." [omit the comma]

    "Whenever a song is being played..."

    "more information about LVS..."



    YEs, it is fine to use capitals in your song titles.

    Personally I would like to see punctuation in your lyrics. The first one left me feeling very breathless.

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    Re: CD Cover

    "Therefore we feel confident, that this sound carrier was bought legally."

    Remove the comma, change "sound carrier" to "sound recording" and maybe say "purchased legally."

    Later in the same section: "beeing" should be "being"
    "headquarter" should be "headquarters"



    PS The guy on the far right of the photo looks like Skippy from Family Ties. :)

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    Re: CD Cover

    Insert a space in "Web:Jabirucrew.ch" - or (better, I think) delete Web altogether, and
    print "http://jabirucrew.ch/".

    b

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    Re: CD Cover

    Say:
    The text (or the lyrics) may be found on these two cover-images
    Say:
    For My Sake
    Pack Your Bags
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    #7

    Re: CD Cover

    I would omit the "German" „ ... “ quotation marks, or change them to the "English" “ ... ” versions.

    (Unless you prefer the low–high versions for stylistic reasons, of course.)

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    Re: CD Cover

    Quote Originally Posted by MrPedantic View Post
    I would omit the "German" „ ... “ quotation marks, or change them to the "English" “ ... ” versions.

    (Unless you prefer the low–high versions for stylistic reasons, of course.)

    MrP
    Curious. I hadn't even noticed that before. Certainly, I agree. If you are going to use English words you should use English punctuation.

    ~R

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