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    Where do commas go in this sentence?

    If there remains a strong clinical concern for mass in the chest, then follow up will be obtained or alternatively a CT scan of the chest will be performed.

    Does another comma go before or, after or, or after alternatively?

    I'm confused on this particular sentence.

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    Erin


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    Re: Where do commas go in this sentence?

    Having worked in hospitals for nearly 40 years, I can tell you there is a style of writing that transcends normal rules of punctuation.
    If there remains a strong clinical concern for mass in the chest, then follow up will be obtained or alternatively a CT scan of the chest will be performed.
    In a medical setting, not using a comma after the "or" would be quite routine particularly as "alternatively" sets the next section apart. Otherwise, use a comma - it will be ignored anyway since doctors have to read quickly!!


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    Re: Where do commas go in this sentence?

    Quote Originally Posted by erempa View Post
    If there remains a strong clinical concern for mass in the chest, then follow up will be obtained or alternatively a CT scan of the chest will be performed.

    Does another comma go before or, after or, or after alternatively?

    I'm confused on this particular sentence.

    Thanks,


    Erin
    You have more of a problem with articles than commas

    If there remains a strong clinical concern for the mass in the chest, then a follow up will be obtained or alternatively a CT scan of the chest will be performed.


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    Re: Where do commas go in this sentence?

    DO NOT USE THE ARTICLES SUGGESTED. This is correct for literary writing - but these are hospital notes and a doctor would not say, for instance, 'then a follow-up'. the reason is, a follow-up suggests one consultation, whereas in this medical situation with mass in the lung or chest, follow-up means an ongoing process of monitoring. A doctor might write, "He has been offered a follow-up appointment" about some patient.


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    Re: Where do commas go in this sentence?

    Quote Originally Posted by David L. View Post
    DO NOT USE THE ARTICLES SUGGESTED. This is correct for literary writing - but these are hospital notes and a doctor would not say, for instance, 'then a follow-up'. the reason is, a follow-up suggests one consultation, whereas in this medical situation with mass in the lung or chest, follow-up means an ongoing process of monitoring. A doctor might write, "He has been offered a follow-up appointment" about some patient.
    Point well taken

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