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  1. Unregistered
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    Hi there,
    Can you proofread the following sentence?

    THere will be a winter sale in my shopping mall in December. There will be special discounts on clothes, shoes and accessories. Please come and enjoy the bargains.

    pete

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    Re: discount

    Hi Pete,
    Except for that random capital H in THere (which I assume is a typo), your sentences are grammatical, but staring "There will be" and "There will be" twice in a row is not great style. What about "We will have a ..." for the first one?

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    Re: discount

    Quote Originally Posted by Unregistered View Post
    Hi there,
    Can you proofread the following sentence?

    THere will be a winter sale in my shopping mall in December. There will be special discounts on clothes, shoes and accessories. Please come and enjoy the bargains.

    pete
    I agree with Barb_D...too many "There will be"

    Another opening sentence could be.

    My shopping mall will be holding a winter sale in December.

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