I wonder if you can help me with the following sentences. Are they right?
-He ordered too to give the child into the custody of the FBI (where should I put the "too"?) Nowhere - the sentence is not grammatically correct. There seem to be two possible alternatives:
He ordered that the child be given into the custody of the FBI
He was ordered to give the child into the custody of the FBI
-When they had to separate their lives, they were both very sad about that Grammatically ok, but it's not a natural sentence.
-The lawyer helped them to get out of trouble Otherwise ok
-He tried to kill himself (is a "by" necessay here?) inhaling the gas in his car Yes - but it is not clear because in the US petrol is known as gas. So "inhaling the exhaust fumes" would be clearer.
-He's very protective with her son Grammatical.
-Put someone to/in prison in prison
-Do you say "in the end of the story" or "at the end of the story"?
-They had been very close, and she had been always there when Mark needed her
-She is a woman who didn't have/hasn't had a very successful life. She was divorced, and didn't see her children.
-She tries her best for her customers ok
-The police recommended a witness protection programme so they would not be found by the Mafia.They are scared the Mafia will try and find them.
Thanks a million!!!!