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The yellow wall stood, tall and proud behind the taffy, while the bright, multi-colored lollipops stood out, demanding attention from onlookers.
Is this sentence correct??? Thanks!!
"The yellow wall stood tall and proud behind...." OR "The yellow wall stood, tall and proud, behind..."
You need to change one "stood" - two in the sentence is awkward. How about changing the first to "rose"? "The yellow wall rose, tall and proud, behind..."
I think you can leave out "from onlookers". The sentence reads better without it.