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    What is wrong w/this sentence?

    The Earth moves around the sun similarly the moon orbits around the Earth.

    Is it just that it needs a semicolon b/wn sun and simlarly?

    Thanks!

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    my suggestions

    Quote Originally Posted by kellye View Post
    Hi and welcome.
    What is wrong w/this sentence?

    The Earth moves around the sun similarly the moon orbits around the Earth.

    Is it just that it needs a semicolon b/wn sun and simlarly? That's certainly the most obvious fault, but there are others:
    1...Sun and Moon should also be capitalized.
    2...I would use the more specific verb "orbits" first.
    3..."orbits around" is redundant.
    4... There should be a comma after "similarly".

    The Earth orbits the Sun; similarly, the Moon (orbits)(moves around) the Earth.
    Thanks!
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