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    • Join Date: Mar 2008
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    #1

    i need help

    hi i just want to ask for your help. i wrote a personal statement for my scholarship but i wasnt sure if it was right.hope you can help me to edit it.


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    #2

    Re: i need help

    Did you forget to include it here?


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    #3

    Re: i need help

    Quote Originally Posted by Horsa View Post
    Did you forget to include it here?
    She has posted in it Writing Topics, but is screaming for help by posting on other people's thread.


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    #4

    Re: i need help

    Thanks I didn't get that.


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    #5

    Re: i need help

    On March 09, 2006 I have entered the United State, a land of promise where many people dream to go. I never knew how life would change for me. What I had in mind was a simple dream, a simple ambition of having a good education as a foundation for my success. God had now permitted me to be here and to experience a binding of a family that I hadn’t had for the past 15 years. Being away from my father was not that easy, especially for my mother who had to play the role of father, mother and best friend. I developed this dedication in life because I realized how my father sacrificed by working far from me and my mother. In that all these contribute to my well being, I must say that I am blessed and that there are no obstacles I can't face because I belong to a strong and loving family.
    My name is _____________ and I am now in my second year of college here at Southwestern College. My first semester here was the first steps in my career plan that of being a nursing major. I started my first semester in summer 2006. Most of my classmates were fluent in English and I didn’t feel confident about my English skills. I was afraid that people might misunderstand me. So, these became a challenge for me to be a part of this community even if English was my second language. I was given an opportunity to work at Academic Success Center (ASC) which was the tutoring center of Southwestern school. That opportunity made me happy and helped me to be a better individual. I learned that life was like a river, you should learn how to flow, and nothing can stop you from going. I am now in my second year of college and despite of my language issue, I am still willing to pursue my goal and be able to maintain my GPA, not only for me, but for my family who believes in me. This great world had opened my mind and heart to appreciate these new things around me: new school, new friends, and new mentors. These shouldn’t be the cause of my fear, but instead accept it as my second family, my security, and my second home who taught me to be strong, and willingness to challenge assumptions of life. I should not stop from here, but instead use these as my footstep for that success. I could perhaps see my self handling my diploma and thanking back my family, and my Southwestern family for giving me that strength and courage to succeed.
    I have nothing to promise, but my sincerity of doing my best in achieving this goal. I am glad that despite of where I came from; this new world accepted me for who and what I am. I have my mentor and friends who stand by me who’s giving me words of wisdom and whose standing as a living proof. May I capable of all your trust and I will endure to rest of my life. Now I am so grateful that I belong to this community college and whatever life would be, I will always be proud to be a part of my home Southwestern College.


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    #6

    Re: i need help

    I answered it in your original post


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    #7

    Re: i need help

    yup i got it thank you so much.. im new in this site thats why i dont know where to post my thing.


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    #8

    Re: i need help

    Hope you find it easier now!

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