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topic:We live in a technological age. However,technology cannot solve all the world's problems. Therefore some people argue that you need to place less emphasis on technological solutions and more on other values.
It can be said without exaggeration that the 20th and 21st centuries are the era of technology, during which humankind has gone through extensive changes in almost all fields. We are no longer plagued by hunger and [or] widespread famines due to the significant changes in agriculture. Diseases such as tuberculosis or smallpox no longer mean a "death sentence" to patients thanks to modern cures and remedies.
Sitting comfortably at home, one can still do business activities. Therefore some people hold the view that, with technology in hand, we can cope with all kinds of problems. However, on the other side are those, myself included, who strongly believe that only technology accompanied by other values will be an effective antidote to current troubles.
To begin with, I'd like to give some evidence about the inability of scientists and technicians [Where is this evidence?]. There are no signs that the gap between the rich and the poor will be narrowed, in fact it is getting wider and wider. The poverty, the inequalities, the abuse between people still exists. I am of the opinion that, no matter how modern we are, these problems will not surely vanish unless we seek help from "other values". These values, personally, refer to traditional andspiritual ones ranging from patriotism to humanism.One could question how these systems of belief will cure contemporary issues. The answer is that it is a matter of education. If we can evoke the holy emotions [????] between people, then they will be more tolerant and generous with each other, thus nobody would be abused or exploited. If we can inspire young people with the flame of patriotism, they will find it their duty to study harder and try to develop their country.
For this aim to be realized, it is without doubt necessary that more moral education be given to the young generation.
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