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    is this text ok?

    I was hardly able to press the shutter button!!
    the owl wasn't willing to have her picture taken anyway!
    that's the best I could do under that circumstances.
    now I realize why nature's professional photographers have to go to extremes to get good pictures from wild animals.
    regards

    please, is this text ok?
    thanks.

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    Smile Re: is this text ok?

    Quote Originally Posted by jctgf View Post
    I was hardly able to press the shutter button!!

    Okay


    the owl wasn't willing to have her picture taken anyway!

    Also, okay. However, unless you know for sure that the owl is female, you might want to use its instead. Thus: The owl wasn't willing to have its picture taken, anyway!


    that's the best I could do under that circumstances.


    I presume here you are referring to the resulting photograph. If so, you could make it a bit clearer. For example:

    This is the best photograph I could take under the circumstances.



    now I realize why nature's professional photographers have to go to extremes to get good pictures from wild animals.

    This one needs a bit more adjustment. For starters "nature's professional photographers" is not a logical comment. You've used "nature's" as a possessive, however nature itself cannot take photographs, nor does it possess photographers.

    More readable would be:

    I now realise why professional photographers who specialize in nature photographs have to go to extremes to capture good pictures of wild animals.



    regards

    please, is this text ok?
    thanks.
    It needs a little adjustment, although the idea is clear enough.

    Hope this helped.

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