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    I need help from English Composition Experts.

    Here is an English compsition assignment that one of my students gave me.

    " I think love is more important than any other things.
    Because human is lived by love.
    There are many kind of love.
    For example, for friends, for family...
    I'm sure human can't live without having love in their heart.
    To breed love having in my heart is problem of life. "

    Below is the correction I've made.

    " I think love is more important than any other thing(anything else).
    Becase love keep us human alive.
    There are many kinds of love.
    For example, love for friends, for family etc...
    I'm sure we human can't live without having love in our heart.
    How to breed love in my heart is the question of my life. "

    I'm not really sure about the last sentence. I think I'll ask him in Japanese what he really meant.

    If there are any mistakes in mine, please correct them.
    Thank you.


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    Re: I need help from English Composition Experts.

    Here is an English compsition assignment that one of my students gave me.

    " I think love is more important than any other things.
    Because human is lived by love.
    There are many kind of love.
    For example, for friends, for family...
    I'm sure human can't live without having love in their heart.
    To breed love having in my heart is problem of life. "

    Below is the correction I've made.

    " I think love is more important than anything else
    Becase love keep us human alive. Because humanity lives on love.
    There are many kinds of love. Love is found in many forms.
    For example, love for friends, for family ...
    I'm sure we humans cannot live without having love in our hearts.
    How to breed love in my heart is the question of my life. How to (foster/nurture) love in my heart is my quest in life
    How to (foster/nurture) love in one's heart is the riddle of life itself.

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