All school children should play team sports
In today’s world , sport is one of the best possibilities how(it should be omitted) to spend (I think 'use' or some other verb should be used) a (our) leisure time. The most popular team sports are football, hockey, baseball, basketball, rugby or (and) soccer.
Some people claim that all scholars should attend collective sports. They believe that when one is member of a team, one(he) would learn how to be more responsible for a (the/that one)team, and how tocope with team‑mates. In addition to(should be omitted)
, one is better prepared to find his place in society. In other words, team sports provide better preparation for life.
However, other people believe that this opinion is erroneous. They think that all scholars do not have to play team sports. They believe that if one wishes to play tennis, badminton or other kind of an(omitted it) individual sport, one (too many of 'one') does not have to play another sport just for feeling to be in a team. Furthermore, one who can (may) be interested in music, reading or something like that(any others), one (not need this) does not have to be fun sport( I am so confused) at all.
To sum up, it seems to me that it is necessary to support young children in their activities. It is not so important if scholars play team sport. Much more important is encouraged them in which they like to do.[/quote]
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