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In a sensational revelation at the press conference, the Nodia Police said that Dr. Rajesh, a dentist, is the murderer of his 14-year-old daughter.I couldn't make sense out of "renewed" there, so I took it out.
Police theory says that Dr. Rajesh was having an extra-marital affair with his colleague Dr. Anita, and his daughter disapproved of it.
Secondly, his daughter was having an affair with the servant.
That fateful night when he returned home he found the servant in his daughter’s room doing somethig objectionable. He took servant onto the terrace on the pretext that he want to talk about something important.
After that he came downstairs and poured a whisky for himself. Then he went inside his daughter's room and killed her the same way he had killed the servant. The Police said motive could be a ‘honour killing’ but that will be ascertained only after further investigation.You need to more consistent with your descriptives (his, her).
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